he could not help the fight with self, tried hard to change god's canard, wanted to understand his own existence, prevailed through rough with all his persistence, finally rest was found when he laid himself below the ground !!
Amen ... Mind blowing piece of work man !! my salute to u !!
seems perfect for my epitaph ... if ever one bothers to write one .... if ever that elusive peace hearkens to the fallen gracious love .... if ever ....
I couldnt help but read your every single piece of creation on this white page... And am I awed ? Hell yes. Loved 'sufi ho jaun' and 'ek banjaarn'. Someone once told me, "you write like your heart os pen-shaped". Me thinx that fits you better. Beautiful poetry I cant help but admire. I will link you. Dont want to miss out reading a genius.
@cinderella to start off... what a 'fundu' name... :) Thanks for visiting my rambling space.Welcome! I m much humbled by your appriciations, but i am no genius. just an odinary guy. I am a Industrial/ product Designer. living and working in banshankari. U an architecht... i always wanted to b one... one of my favorite subjects. Never fails to amaze and awe me... once again. The pleasure is all mine.
@aria Thank you so much for the compliments...:) i delebrately wanted to introduce a visual in this composition. It is like the final punch! but visually. i am happy that u liked the idea.
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An ode to the maverick ...
he could not help
the fight with self,
tried hard
to change god's canard,
wanted to understand
his own existence,
prevailed through rough
with all his persistence,
finally rest was found
when he laid himself below the ground !!
Amen ...
Mind blowing piece of work man !! my salute to u !!
This was really lovely and in a sense even sadly romantic. It captures the failure in life and a search still ongoing in passing.
I have read this piece over and over a few times now and cannot see to stop the feeling of being drawn in.
T
So haunting!That was very well written :)
seems perfect for my epitaph ... if ever one bothers to write one .... if ever that elusive peace hearkens to the fallen gracious love .... if ever ....
Alok
@deepesh
Couldn't dream of a better compliment.
@inside our hands...& sameera
thanks alot for dropping by. your thoughts are welcomed, recieved and much appriciated.
@Alok
I would pray. :)
@CasperBABA
Really nice and touching ... all joy and every sorrow!!
@DD
Pease to me is a dis-ease
On earth rare to be found
From you I learnt the reality
truth is Lo! below the ground
This leaves me grasping for more...yet I very much love its demurity, within which you sewed the words so fine...
Beautiful !
Your peofile reads you're a desiger. What do you design ?
And where in B'lore you stay btw ?
I couldnt help but read your every single piece of creation on this white page...
And am I awed ? Hell yes.
Loved 'sufi ho jaun' and 'ek banjaarn'.
Someone once told me, "you write like your heart os pen-shaped". Me thinx that fits you better.
Beautiful poetry I cant help but admire.
I will link you. Dont want to miss out reading a genius.
casper .. this is awesome! one of the very best, I've ever read. the presentation is compelling too .. great ..
@tosha
Thank you so much... :)
@cinderella
to start off... what a 'fundu' name... :)
Thanks for visiting my rambling space.Welcome! I m much humbled by your appriciations, but i am no genius. just an odinary guy.
I am a Industrial/ product Designer. living and working in banshankari. U an architecht... i always wanted to b one... one of my favorite subjects. Never fails to amaze and awe me... once again.
The pleasure is all mine.
@aria
Thank you so much for the compliments...:)
i delebrately wanted to introduce a visual in this composition. It is like the final punch! but visually.
i am happy that u liked the idea.
i wonder if those words would ever allow the bones beneath it to "R.I.P"..If i were under it, it would "rip" me apart...
well..another masterful piece madata...keep 'em coming..ur as good as what you show to the world...
@ajay
I am truely honored and humbled!
welcome to my space...
hope to see you often now.
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